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Do you agree with the following statement.

It is better to live on campus than off campus in university.

1. convenience

2. money saving

3. better for academic perfomance

Nowadays, some universities are facing dormitory shortages. This is the result of an increase in the number of students going to colleges. Some claim that staying off campus is better than living on campus in the univercity. I disagree with this opinion because staying on campus brings students many benefits, it makes life more convenient, saves expenses, and provides students with an environment suitable for academic studies.

Living on campus makes life more convenient for the students. That's because living on campus allows students to get to the classroom and the library within walking distance. My brother, Jack, is an undergraduate. He lives 7 miles from the school with a boarding family. Everyday when he goes to class and comes home, he has to stand to wait for the bus to arrive. As a person of many interests, he takes a lot of courses and has to bring his notebooks from home to campus and then back to home everyday. "It is really tiring," he once told me, "especially on rainy days, when I can't put my bag down and have to stand there waiting for the bus with a heavy bag on my back." If he had choosen to stay on the campus, he could have saved a lot of time and energy.

What's more, living on campus also cut expenses for students. The dormitory is cheaper than renting a house off campus and the food in the school cafeteria costs less than restaurants outside the university. Students aren't completely economically independant. For those students who get loans for their education, being economical helps students by allowing them to get lower loan. A high loan during college may end up being a heavy burden after one joins the work force. For those who get economic support from their parents, it'll also be nice to be considerate to their parents by saving some money. So it is obvious that living on campus costs less.

Last but not least, living on campus can provide students with an atmosphere more suitable for study. For those who stays off campus, they may have to face a noisy neighbor. And they may have incompatible time schedule with their roommate——they don't have any other place to go to, and may have to finish their assignments while hearing their roommates having a party in the living room. However, if students live on campus, they can go to the lab from their dormitory very easily. And they also have access to the school library, which is a very quiet and comfortable place to do one's studies. What's more, all the other students in the library are also doing their work. This provides an atmosphere that no rented apartment can offer.

In summary, considering the convenience it brings, the money it saves, and the atmosphere it creates, I agree with the statement that for university students, living on campus is better than off campus.

点评：本文作者是2018年11月参加托福考试的考生猿辅导英语作文批改，写作连续拿了两次30分。这是他平时的一篇练习，没有二次修改，真实还原限时写作的发挥，一些语言上的错误也做了保留。

欣赏作文之余【托福写作批改】（62）29分托福独立写作范文，2020年之后的考生需要注意猿辅导英语作文批改，托福写作改革后对于词汇和语法等细节的判分更加严格猿辅导英语作文批改，少量错误可以接受，但是大量的出错肯定会造成不必要的丢分。

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